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Offline Aislinn

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« on: August 18, 2008, 11:45:24 PM »
(Here is a story I had written after a dream I had. Made a picture to actually go along with it. Hehe. I was, and still am in a starwarsy phase of thinking.  No it isn't finished with any kinda of satisfactory ending I know, I hit that spot and am at a indecision of what direction to take it. I have two outcomes in my head, just don't know what way I really want it to go. Sink or swim time.)

 Icella stepped out of her tent, her body still trembling. She brought a hand and to her cheek and wiped a wet cheek. The dream or what ever it was still vivid in her mind as her amber eyes fell on the other tent.  She sucked in a ragged breath and took a step to the tent. She needed to wake Alfee and tell him what she seen. She got to the door of his tent, and a sound brought her head around.   

 "Icella? Something wrong?" Alfee said from behind her. She could see the embers of the fire reflected in his blue eyes when she faced him. Her hand balled in fist at her stomach wet her lips and swallowed what ever lump that was forming at the base of her throat. Alfee stepped forward and placed a hand on her shoulder and a trembled raced through her body once more.
 “Something is wrong...” Her voice cracked and she swallowed again. "I have seen it... I... It was a house under attack." She said though her voice didn't crack it was quiet now. Her amber eyes dropped from his as she spokes as the vision came through again. "The family will be.... “Her voice trailed off and she felt him squeezed her shoulder.
 "Hold on...” His frown couldn't be seen in the darkness. "It could be a dream." he said but he could sense the heighten emotions around here and could tell this was no normal dream. He watched as she shrugged off his hand and turned away.
"It was no dream. It was a warning, I know... I feel it." Icella said as she walked to the fire and bent picking up a stick and poked at the embers. The blast of heat and flames that flickered made her gasp as the vision came back once more. The screams echoing in her ears as the blurred bodies left the house before it erupted in flames. She gasped standing and stumbled backwards. "No..." She hissed and stopped only when she felt alfee holding her.
 "Icella, you need to tell me what you seen in this vision.” He spoke sternly as he turned her around. He was confused by her behavior but something had deeply upset her and he wanted to get to the bottom of it. "Look at me." He spoke evenly and calmly hoping to calm her.
 Icella looked up at him this time tears brimmed on her eyes. "We need to go to help them. We need to hurry." She knew that house... she knew that family, she knew it was up to her.  “They will be attacked... I don't know by whom... But I know they need help."  She brought a hand up to wipe her cheek again and looked away. This blatant show of emotions should of embrasse her in front of her master who she was training from. But she couldn't stop herself.  "Please Master Akis, can we go to them now. I know where it will happen, we haven't much time I feel it."
 Alfee let go of her and stepped back. There was desperation in her voice and something that wasn't at all like Ice at all.  "Yes of course Ice." He said with a nod. "You can brief me on what you seen on the way. Let’s pack up now. “He said and turned to quickly take down the camp. Icella nodded and turned to quickly take down hers to. Every inch of her body told her to rush in doing so there time was short before they could get there.


 Ice brought her hands in to be paced on her rolling stomach then to tap on her knees. Time was going to swiftly and the speeder to slow. She bit her lip and looked over at her master she didn't tell him whose family they were saving. "Master Akis,” She said quietly another tremble shown through her voice. "It’s my family.” She said and looks forward again tears brimmed on her lids. She could sense him looking at her and she looked forward. “I must have done something to put them in danger. I couldn't see who was attacking them; I don't know what they wanted. “She shook her head and closed her eyes.
 "You might not have done anything Ice, don't put the blame on yourself. We will get there on time to save them." He said evenly. Her emotions ran strong and he could them through the force. "Ice, things happen in the force that can't be predicted, if they are supposed to happen they can't be stopped. You must try to remember your balance in the force."
 Ice nodded at his words and brought a hand to her face, "I know, I know master akis,” and she sucked in a breath and let it out slowly, if they had to fight to save them she needed to be under control.  "It should be up here just a short way over the hills."
 "Alright." Alfee said and looked over at here a moment as she slowly centered herself once more then looked forward again. They were surrounded in just the sound of the speeder when they came over the hill and the smoke could be seen.
 “Oh no...” Alfee heard Ice say and he frowned slowing down. They could still be under attack right now, if so driving up will be dangerous to themselves.
 "No, no don't slow." Ice said her voice told him that again she was approaching panic. "We can't go in like this, it could be dangerous." He frowned again at the touchiness of the situation. "Ice it is important to stay calm here and remember your center. Be confident in there safety... " he let that thought sit with her then jumped from the speeder and began to move swiftly across the ground only moments later he heard Ice join him behind her. Falling carefully instep with him like she had countless of times before.  They moved swiftly over the ground and approached the house. He couldn't see any sort of vehicles around as they approached and he was sure this was a bad sign. The house was fully engulfed in flames by now and he stopped a little ways out. Turning slowly he easily read ice's eye's and could feel her hopelessness. "Wait here...”  He said softly putting a hand on her when she went to follow anyways. "Icella, I said stay." His voice was soft but firm; his blue eyes searching his amber one's till she was sure he understood. Then slowly he turned away and sprinted to the engulfed dwelling. His blue eyes scanned the outside the dwelling and the tracks were numerous and scattered around, they weren't uniform, but more interesting was the two sets, one barefoot, the other the person was clearly being dragged. Moving closer to the flaming house he shed his cloak and entered the building. 
 Ice felt her body tremble as she watched her master enter the building. She hoped that they were not too late, that she hadn't failed them. She was aware of the tears that wet her cheeks and she fought the urge to run forward. When Alfee emerged from the burning building Ice lost all hope. She felt, before she neither seen nor heard that what he found was no living soul. Icella felt her body grow cold inside as he approached, and she uttered softly "No.... I did this to them, it is my fault. I have failed." She said as her knees finally gave out and she fell to the ground. She felt her heart crumble with in the pain enough to rock her very being the strength of her pain was enough to keep alfee silent a moment as he looked over his grieving apprentice. Through out he had felt every emotion of his apprentice and her pain radiated pain through him. He stood over her looking down as she grieved then softly he said, "I seen only two bodies with in," From what he could tell one was her disabled brother and the other the mother.  "I believe though that... two were taken hostage Ice. It is not too might not be late for them...”
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Re: Failure
« Reply #1 on: August 19, 2008, 12:09:37 AM »
Very nice!  Keep rolling :!:


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